Hello IELTS students,
Here is another IELTS writing task 2 article from one of our IELTS nurses. Look at what this student wrote and see if you can learn from their mistakes as well as the corrections our UK native IELTS teacher provided them with.
Q. Some people believe that it is bettestraight to university after secondary school. Others prefer to take a few years off to work before continuing their education.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of each of these strategies?
Give support for your answer and include relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. 250 words.
It is a good thing that more people are born
more tha en die. If they did not, n other case the population would soon disappear in more or less time. H The humanity is comes ing from a single family. What would have happened if the population did hey do not increase rise continued? There would be just a single family o in the whole earth. The problem is that now, we are maybe too many chand not enough less resources for of survival e.
This is a real problem because is no solution yet to resolve it. There i
l , you cannot stop or forbid the people from to making e children. One example is China, where the government’s policy dido not resolve d the problem. One of the causes may can be that , in_some countries, the government gives social aid to for the large families (European countries). In some countries the birth rates are lower ess than beside the death rates, so the natural increase is negative. In the ise countries, the government encourages birth rates financially the birth rates. Other causes can be psy ichological or religiouse rea isoens, or unplanned pregnancy among the young people. These are about birth rates. O ln the other hand, the death rate is less in comparison ration to the past because the medical system keeps the humans more safe from or the biological harm s. In the past, a simple bacteria killed hundre ids and thousands of people. One other reason can be the relative armistice (comparing to the first and second world war).
In my opinion overpopulation is a problem, yes, but not the grea
stest. Maybe one of the bigger problems is the selfishness, which and this can lead ge to inequality of power (eg: money) and la eck of food for some people, not directly the too many much people.
Good job, Arthur. You have some good arguments and good organisation. Please look carefully at the changes I have made, and try to avoid some of these errors in your next essay. Pay particular attention to your spelling. ~6